[Harry Potter] Through the Veil, and Who was There

[a]

what happened to the "?

'People's voices laughed' Could you word that in a better way? It doesn't make sense. The sound of people laughing... etc and so on for some of the sentences

'I trusted you would save me, but you never came' The first part does not make sense

'failing' failed

I could go on..?

[Princess Cliche]

Eh.

Rip it apart if you want.

I wrote it for a challenge two, three years ago.

And I didn't use " s as a stylistic choice, since they now didn't have to speak to communicate, as they were in an otherworldy place.