[one direction] human again.

[bloodyhell]

an example writing of a story i'm thinking of writing, based off of the t.v. show, survivordon't laugh it's a legit idea


The wind is cold, much colder than anyone should expect wind to be. It bites at my cheeks and stings my nose, mocking me, and my inability to escape. It feels as if the weather is paying me back for all the times I escaped from its harsh realities into the comfort of my home, the walls keeping out its true power. I shiver one more time, burying my head into my knees in an effort to recreate that comfort, but to no avail. The bamboo and leaf structure rattles above me, reminding me of its frail nature, despite the hours of work we put into making it as strong as we could dream of.
The rest of the tribe sits with me, huddled against Mother Nature, as the fire pit lays empty, no one brave enough to try and start something inside it in the midst of this storm. Some of them wrap their arms around each other, using the advantage of body warmth. I shake my head, returning my eyes to the beach that stretches out as far as I can see.
“Some storm, huh?” comes the shaking voice of someone beside me – Liam, I realize, without looking. I just nod, setting my chin on my knees, tightening my arms around myself. I am hoping to send a silent message to him that I will not cuddle for warmth – not now, not ever. But he reaches his arm around my shoulders, none the less, and I find it impossible not to lean into the warmth he radiates.
It is just so cold.


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[a]

-I shivered one more time- um instead of using one more time... could you like use adjectives? Like for example - I winced, the cold air something something blah. I don't know how to feel about the sentence about the bamboo... It could be said in a better way..

But overall - I love the grammar. It's really good.

[Sienna]

I actually agree with Izzy here, but overall, this is pretty awesome. It has me hooked already.